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if i died,
right now and here.
would you,
of all people my dear,
care enough to shead a tear?

if i died,
in a year or two,
would you my friend,
of all people i know,
care enough to speak for me?

if died,
at a ripe old age,
would my love,
of all i hold dear,
care enough to hold my hand?

if i never died,
here and now,
in a year or two,
when im withered and old,
would you my dear, my love, my friend,
take any notice?

would i plunge into a movie set,
full of dark paint with props here and there.
to forever sit,
practicing my last lines,
preparing for the day when i will lie,
peacful, soundly, never waking.

waiting for a day to come,
but never really expecting it.
knowing it will never really come.
wondring how you are.
and there i pose my question,
would you my dear, my love, my friend,
take any notice?
©2006-2009 ~FritziFaust
:iconfritzifaust:

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written in a blind flurry of inpired fingers
most likely riddled w/mistakes and typos,
plz ppl, give me words of critic and wisdom

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:iconhannahxbanana148:
WOW This is good. keep up the good work. wel byeas
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danke

--
"All that glitters...
Even the stars
All things precious...
Even your life
The King of Bandits
Can steal it all
In the blink of an eye"

King of Bandits Jing
:iconpisstified:
I like how you use the words change the words from "my dear" to "my friend" and then to "my love". It adds a nice twist. The topic is an overall nice one. I have thought about the same things before but have not been able to format them into poetry. The last two stanzas are my favorite. They could probably be a poem in themselves if you wanted them to be, but I think the way you have it is best. For some reason this makes me think of my friend who passed away recently, and it nearly brings me to tears. I can't help but read over it again and again even though it makes me more emotional each time. You're writing is lovely.....and the title is very fitting....
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aww, thanks so much! and im sry about your friend, i hope youre ok about it, it's hard to lose someone you love

--
"All that glitters...
Even the stars
All things precious...
Even your life
The King of Bandits
Can steal it all
In the blink of an eye"

King of Bandits Jing
:icondjmarkonv:
I love you and your poetry, Fritzi. In fact, I might start writing some poetry to pass the time at AEP.
:iconpisstified:
I'm doing good. Thanks for the concern....:)
:iconfritzifaust:
anytime

--
"All that glitters...
Even the stars
All things precious...
Even your life
The King of Bandits
Can steal it all
In the blink of an eye"

King of Bandits Jing
:iconlweeling:
This one is great! I love it ><

--
And then there was Silence....

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